Tuesday, August 18, 2009

Punished

Naked, cold, limited.

The tile floor of the kitchen had long since numbed her behind. She ran her hand over the length of the chain from the radiator to her collar as she shifted uncomfortably. The flimsy nightie that He had allowed her to wear did nothing to stop the cold.

She looked out the window and saw the sun rising over the mountains. Morning was coming and she hadn't slept a bit. Though He knew she wouldn't, tied up downstairs. Eyes heavy she leaned her head on the chain and rested, knowing He would be down soon.

He watched her from the doorway. Her head laid against her hands, leaning on the chain. Walking over to her he took the keys from his pocket, unlocked the collar and gathered her into his arms. He sighed and thought in time she would learn as he carried her upstairs.

13 comments:

  1. How do you do this every time? In so few paragraphs, you transport me to the scene and force me to feel for the characters! It takes most of us writers much editing to come up with something this tight. I applaud this amazing skill of yours.

    ReplyDelete
  2. Power in brevity...yes. Succinct and sweet.

    ReplyDelete
  3. Topaz is right...It's a natural skill that is pretty admirable...not everyone owns it.

    ReplyDelete
  4. you rock Gray, i loved this one! it also reminds me why i love the carpet on masters floor lol ^_^

    ReplyDelete
  5. The writing is amazing but it's the last line that gets me.

    ReplyDelete
  6. Topaz: You made me blush!! You are too sweet hun.

    Luna Mauvaise: Thank you though not even close to the level of your writing.

    Ronjazz: Awee thank you so much hun.

    Sqweakygurl: Carpets are a girl's best friend at times.;)

    Aurore: Thank you so much!

    ReplyDelete
  7. Clap Clap Clap Where did you get this great talent? Is it learned or just natural?

    ReplyDelete
  8. Ahhh.... And the training begins.

    Raw, cold, distant, unapologetic, and still soft and loving.

    ReplyDelete
  9. La Roo: *blushes* I just write what I think. Thank you hun.

    River Girl: awee.. good leaving you breathless is a great thing.;)

    Soul Powers: *grins*

    ReplyDelete
  10. Breaking in a new submissive can be hard work on both of you!

    ReplyDelete